One of the things that I really wanted to improve on in my second essay of the semester was going more in-depth on each topic I bring up. My first essay was decent but it could have been much better if I had slowed down and elaborated more on the topics supporting my thesis. My global change that I am working on for my second rough draft of my Technology essay is elaboration. I believe this will make my paper stronger because it will help the reader better understand my argument as well as make the flow of the paper better.